(A phone conversation)
She : “What time are you coming home”
He : “About 9”
She : “Come sooner if possible, a surprise awaits you”
He: “You know I hate suspense, come out with it”
She: “Then keep guessing”
He: “Baby, am tired already, don’t have the energy to play guessing games”
She: “Hahaha, cut the call and see to it that you come home soon.”
Sighing, he cut the call and concentrated on the document he was proof reading. Once done, he switched off the laptop and let his mind wander, thinking what could be the surprise. She had just joined a reputed fashion house . Maybe she had designed a new dress to impress him. Smiling to himself, he winded up things from his desk and started to leave. While waiting at a traffic signal, he mulled what would they have for dinner. If there was one thing she absolutely had no clue about was cooking. Boarding school, hostel, PG – these were the three words she uttered accompanied by a sorry smile, while she relished his pasta at one potluck get together, when he asked her “what have you cooked”.
“If she has a surprise for me today, I will have one for her too. Let me try some Indo-Chinese today. She will love it.”
He rang the door bell to his apartment.
In his mind, he saw her coming with a whiff of freshness and a hint of fragrance.
All he saw was a hint of flour on her cheeks and a whiff of garam masala.
Bewildered, he made way for the giggling neighbour hurrying away.
“Thanks a lot”, she shouted to the neighbour.
“Welcome”, she said with a bright smile.
His heart soared.
No….. It cant be the end!!!
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Am a bit confused here..do you want it to proceed or do you feel it is incomplete, and does not give you the clear picture 🙄
PROCEED……….. ASAP!
The story is this much only dear, ‘the surprise’ was she cooking for him 🙂
Rest is up to your imagination 😛
Aww!! She cooked for him?!! 😀
Yeah 😉
Awww, what a sweet story! 🙂
Reminds me of some TGND-OH times. 😀
Thanks TGND 🙂
Glad you could relate 😉
I love every story that involves food 😉
So what did they eat for dinner?!
Oh and I loved the sound of whiff of Garamond Masala 🙂
We are amar-premi’s of food 😀 😀
Its up to you to guess what was for dinner 😉
I was visualising about zack , although the way, until i saw the tag FICTION 😦
😀 😀 😀
Thought it was real, but guess its fiction. Please write part two of this involving more food and a very romantic end… 🙂
Its pure fiction OHW 🙂
There is no part two actually, all left to your imagination 😉
I thought it was Zack and you too ! And then there were a few pointers – you cook so well so umm you would have probably contributed a lot to the potluck.
But yes, I was about to ask which fashion house you joined though 😛
Very nice writing there Visha! 🙂
Hahaha, I need to break the image that I write only non-fiction
Thanks Toffee, glad you liked it 🙂
We want more… btw if the climax reads they had extra food !!! then you know whose number to send to them ! 😀 😀
The poor girl has just started cooking, that too with the help of their neighbour 😛 😛
Of course ghost babu, your number will be on speed dial IF at all there is extra food
cuttee story Visha..Reminds me of our initial days of marriage and I havent even had stepped inside the kitchen till then ..:)
Happy that you could relate to it Ramya 🙂
Sweet story Visha :). I guessed she cooked something special and ensured that was the surprise after he remembered that she didn’t know cooking. Flour on the cheeks and whiff of garam masala, did she make parathas and curry or chole bature or….? 🙂
Thanks Seena 🙂
Your guess is perfect 😉
Haha, the dinner menu I do not know..since she just started cooking, that too with the help of her neighbour, might be something basic 🙂
Awww!! Sweet one!!! Inspired by soem real incident ;)?
Thanks Smita 🙂
Nope, pure fiction 😉
Sweet! 🙂
Glad you liked it Keirthana 🙂
Good to read fiction at your blog… 🙂
🙂 🙂
At first I thought it should go on. Now I think it is nice and sweet as it is 😛 Call me indecisive 😀
Hahaha, the story really is this much only, the rest is up to one’s imagination 🙂
…a whiff of garam masala!! huh how I miss it!
nicely written! I had to resist myself from reading the last line directly after reading the first few lines! 🙂
(passing you an award) finally someone noticed that 😥 I thought why no one is commenting on the two most important lines of the post which was the base for this idea 😀 😀 😀
Thanks for dropping by 🙂
hahaha! 🙂
lucky you to have it written off before my temptation took over and do a peek-a-boo! 🙂
again, well written!
hahaha, thanks again 🙂
err…I still can’t figure out what lines you two are talking about? 😦
hahaha, dont worry..you caught on to those exact lines[the couplet – whiff, hint, flour and fragrance] 😉
Nice Visha! Loved it 🙂 🙂
Thanks LS 🙂
Glad to read your fiction…good one 🙂
Thanks Rebel 🙂
Super Visha!! 🙂 I kinda guessed she would have cooked for him 😀 While her surprise survived, he lost his idea. SIgh! Such is life 🙂 He must be happy isn’t it, that she cooked for him.. may be he is too afraid to be the “experimental rat” 😀 😀
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Her surprise blew his mind 😉 😛
How cute!!!
Hey nepaliaustralian, welcome here 🙂
Glad you liked the story 🙂
thats a nice story Visha.. may story at many homes.. 🙂
Thanks A 🙂
Such a welcome change to read fiction in your blog V.. Very well written, I must say!
Welcome change 😯 😯 😯
Are you tired of the non-fiction Sia darling 😥 😥 😥 (wail)
The professional chef makes even better food for his better half .. Fiction or no fiction, your the queen of mushy posts..
Who is the professional chef here 🙄
Aww! Such a cute story!!
Thanks Smitha 🙂
It demands a continuation..M dying for more:)
Vishal
http://www.vishalbheeroo.wordpress.com
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It really has no continuation, the fact that she cooked for him is the surprise.
A hint of flour on her cheeks?? Oh my god…so she wants to surprise him by making love like in that famous scene in the movie Ghost 👿 😈
(goes off to check Ghost in IMDB)
Now that, is a wonderful thought 😛 😛
See, thats why I kept the post open-ended, what an imagination Santoori 😀 😀 😀
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ry45I2a2oRE This is the original scene which bollywood has copied to death with flour, chawal, anda, sarsoon and what not 🙄
I swear I did not plagiarise 🙄
My characters do not even think like that 😛
awww!! so sweet!! 🙂 loved it!!
Thanks Deepa 🙂
I was expecting a different end too 🙂 Nice one Visha … Ha another thing I am one of your silent readers 🙂
Hey vinuswati 🙂
Happy that you de-lurked, glad to see you here 😉
I hope whatever she cooked was worth all the suspence. 😛
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Aww such a sweet surprise ..Even now this is some thing I do to surprise my husband when he comes back home 🙂
Chucky is already a darling, looks like her mom is not far behind 😉
LF family is adorable 🙂
hehehehe she cooked!!!!! adorable!!!
RED!!! you came ‘bai’ here 😀
This is my surprise 🙂